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D_A
12-06-2007, 05:45 PM
Hi Oz
I must emphasise right from the start my comments / tips are about the composition of Oz’s images as promotional/ advertising tools.
I have 20 or so years experience mucking around in the music / promotions / event management industry so heres a few things I have learnt along the way that hopefully will help you out.
I was asked to present a workshop for a social worker friend of mine about how to prepare ads for emerging bands for one of her music courses she runs dealing with juvenile offenders.
I couldn’t find the finished workshop notes for you, I have included the first draft of my notes
for her course, so if seem to ramble on, or if things seem to jump around, also there will be some notes to myself to in brackets for me to expand on in future drafts ( )

I have done a pic by pic critique that I hope you find usefull.








The primary purpose of posters or print ads is to promote sales for your product. You are not producing great art, nor are you trying something that looks really cool.


Your sole focus is to design your ad so that it grabs the attention of your target audience in such a way that they WANT to read what your ad has to say, thus generating sales fo your product.


Your band may say only this certain photo can be used for this ad and/or special text font. If these don’t fit into the strategies outlined below, pack your bags and leave because your just wasting your time.

The most important thing to know is that people do not read newspapers nor do they look at posters stuck up on a wall, they will only skim/glance at a newspaper/magazine page and as for posters on wall most people will not even know that it was there.
You will have about 100th of a second for something in your ad to jump out, grab them by their balls to make them want to read what it is you have produced.

This can be done by several ways. How the text is placed, what colours are used in your ad, the colour of the paper for the poster, what photos are used and the list goes on. There is no one right way for this to be done but thousands of wrong ways.


Important tip 1: this really is important
Focus points
In English speaking countries we write from the top left hand side of the page across to the right, finishing at the bottom of the page on the right.
When people glance a page/poster their first focus point is on the top left corner, their gaze then travels diagonally down the page finishing at the bottom right. If there is nothing in this diagonal line that grabs them in that very very very brief glance they turn the page.

Also if the majority of your ads information is outside of this left>right zone, and you have used the points I have raised below – people wont look ( re-word last sentence to include symmetry)

Try looking at how newspapers are set out, where are the ads positioned on the first couple of pages, how are the actual stories placed.



Once you have finished your add, print off a copy and stick it on your wall, look at it for a while and you will find that your eyes are drawn to a particular place within the add. Is your core information in this focus point? If not you will have to either change this focus point or change your core information placement to this focus point.


Punch factor 1 – 2 – 3:

Punch 1: BIG BOLD grabs your attention. You probably have seen on pin boards a plain white paper A4 piece of paper that says something like FREE SEX / FREE BEER in giant size plain black text, that takes up to 1/3 of the page, under that in a small font is generally reads Now that I have your attention,> have you seen my lost dog > loose weight fast call me on……... Now that I have your attention is the key, you stoped what you were doing to start to read what the paper had to say. Woman’s magazine headlines are great examples of this, MY NIGHT OF FORCED DRUG HELL or SARAH TELLS OF ADOPTION AGONY
This is punch 1, something that makes a person stop skimming and start to read your ad. Has to be big has to stand out. How many of you started to read this document from the start then automatically skipped down to “You will have about 100th of a second”……. Your vision is automatically drawn to big and bold. ((lots more )


Punch 2: not as big nor as bold but still dominates the ad space sets the tone for you ad . 1 to 2 sentences-A sub-headline of no more than 2 using power words (see section on language) that briefly describe what you are selling or entice the reader to continue to read further on. (expand n examples)

Punch 3: Your bands photo or some sort of symbol that is appropriate to that reinforces punch 2, or could be another sub-headline further down the page.







Symmetry
People like order, they like things to have a natural progression or flow.
People are also lazy if your ad / poster is set out with clumps of text all over the place that don’t flow on from each other, or if your ad / poster looks to cluttered with text people will subconsciously skip your ad.
Clutter & KISS: Keep it Simple Stupid. Blank space is your friend, use it do not feel that you have every square inch covered with text or an image.


TEXT
With your text use a maximum of up to 3 different fonts only.
1 font for your headline / punch 1
1 font for your punch 1
Use a standard boring font like Ariel for the remainder of your ad / poster information. Remember your goal is to convey information in a short time span, this information has to jump out at the reader in one hit, your reader should not have to spend time trying to work out what you are saying because you have used a fancy hard to read font.
Never use text affects on any text except for your punch 1 and even then I would recommend against that as well. I personally only use 2 fonts. Something easily readable in punch 1 and then Ariel for the remainder. You can achieve a remarkable variation using 1 base font and playing around with font size, bold, character space and character rotation.

Always and I repeat always either have your text on align left or justified. Never use centre alignment, centre align lacks symmetry and looks to hard read, if it looks to hard to read people wont read it. Italics look awful. ( more )

Text colour apart from your headline either use black text on a very light background or white text on a very dark background. Once you have had a lot of experience designing ads you will know how far you can change these variations.
A way I have found to see how effective my text colour choices for a colour add is to print it in black & white. Your add may look fantastic in colour on your screen but once printed in B&W you will be surprised how different it looks and how much sharpness and clarity is lost.


Language

To me the English language is divided into three categories:
Power words, neutral words & self-defeating or wishy washy words.
Power words are exciting strong words that create or reinforce your message, they create or stir a reaction from your reader. Self-defeating words detract or take away from the punch you have created. Neutral words do not enhance or detract from your add pitch.

Example

BLOODLUSTER 84
One of Adelaide’s best blood metal bands
Come and see us perform new songs from our about to be new release
Sat 18 Feb

As you would agree the above is pretty boring with no real oomph. “Come and see us” is very wishy washy almost to the point where you are pleading for an audience.

BLOODLUSTER 84
Unique High Energy Blood Metal from Adelaide’s outstanding leading metal Act
Special once off debut performance of new material

(work on example heaps more)




Placement
Where is your add going to be placed and what size is it?
You design for use as a poster will not be suitable for a 1/8 page street press ad. If using street press look at what type of adds will surround yours, try and make your ad stand out From the others some how.
(work on example heaps more)



Be very prepared
Know your deadlines
With any add you create well before your deadline , I found that by creating 3 other versions of the same add on separate days, stick these adds on a wall together and after just looking at them for a while, couple of days you will most likely incorporate bits from each add into your final product.

D_A
12-06-2007, 05:47 PM
IM DUN ROAMIN
Pic of horse on far left drop down till its knees are off page
Increase font size of im dun roaming and have it running from top left about ¾ : 4/5 way along top of page.
Address of stud move to bottom of page.
Reword blood line bit to ‘Why look any further” or “look no further, your search is over with bloodlines of ……….Dooley M”.
have this text aligned to left or justified underneath IM DUN ( text size about ½ of im dun roaming size)
Clandella QH Stud, place adderess under this bit then rest. Left justification not centred id increase font size by a few points..
Service fee ……..change text justification to right justification and place against right boarder.
Increase web address size by a few points.

Double K.
Increase Double K by a few points till it covers left to right of page
Replace buckskin…. font with a more boring type change to black colour.
White text on background very hard to read, try printing this add in B&W, you can not read it.
Change text to black, lower opacity of shrubbery behind this text. Change justification to justified and start text at rump of whole horse pic, this way you can increase text size by 3 – 4 points easily. Change” why would you not want him for your breeding….” To “ how can you not….” “ can you afford not to ……..
Daiqiri…. Left justification along left side. Stud fee…. I would rearrange order of each line from smallest to largest and put on a right justification and end text box just to the left of the horses nose. There is also a white blurry spot between the foliage in the centre of the ad that I find draws the eyes to focus on –

Jebadiah (portrait style with the black border 1/8 page ad id say)
To cluttered, far to much happening in the space for the eyes to focus on what you want them to focus on , white text again defeats what your trying to say.

Jebadiah ½ or ¼ page
Apart from the heading their does not seam to be a disenable change in font size. I would make some bigger and decrease some of the other. Also your text placement created a circular type of action that drew my eyes to the pic of the guy on the horse. I also found the blurring of the building behind the Jebadiah text on the right distracting.

Golden Mystic ( mysticdone)
Id increase the Golden mystic by a few points. I would justify the text to the left. Id change the first line to “enhance your breeding…….” Id increase the size by 2 points and bold it. Does your……is a question you never have questions in adds, only statements, never give your punters a chance to think and move on. Does my breeding program need a little mystic, if I think it doesn’t I turn the page or look at next add.
Id loose the star in the trees on the left.
The text at the bottom id stretch out and bold.

Golden Mystic (sunset)
As an A2 Poster would be ok, as an ½ or ¼ page needs a total rethink. Shadow behind golden mystic needs to be tightened up a lot. Font choice and placement combined with image effects makes it to blurry and spaced out. Looks like a busy workspace.

I hope you have fun playing around with your work.

Rodeo Oz
12-06-2007, 06:22 PM
Thanx for your tips...

MWR
14-06-2008, 02:37 PM
Hi, I'm a newbie here but very interested in your ads. I'm also a bit of a tragic when it comes to critiquing ads that go into Horse Deals (which is pretty much the bible of wheeling and dealing in horse flesh in Aus), so I guess I'm speaking more as an end-user rather than critiquing the photography itself.

Given that these all look like western/QH - the gratuitous "butt shot" is very important. :D "Dey like big butts" in western, and loads of bling too - so you do get ads with lots of pink sparkly bits (they annoy the hell out of me, but that's just a personal thing - and I guess it depends which mag the ad is going into too).

Getting a shot that highlights a stallions good points, and moves the eye away from its bad points is very important - with QH you should be right with a gratuitous buttshot.

I really liked the headshot of the pally, because it shows such a kind eye. You've also selected a more "confo" shot in that ad, which is very useful when it comes to comparing stallions side by side.

Questions are being asked on horse forums about how much photoshopping is too much. There are ads out there that plump out a horse's tail, sets it more "uphill", cover up big scars etc etc - not really giving a true indication of the horse. It also makes a lot of people ask, "Hmm, what are they trying to hide?"

And a lot love to cut and paste the horse onto greener pastures or fool around with the background ... Personally, I guess the basics work best here - uncluttered background (you wouldn't believe how many broken fences, stripped cars, 44s etc) appear in some ads!

If possible, photos of outstanding progeny are helpful (perhaps with the dam's breeding rather than name or eg. ASH x TB) or even better - photos of the stallion himself performing. Action shots are great. I'm not into western, but I still appreciate a pony eyeing off a cow (specially those ones with the rider quite straight up and down, and the horse is almost sideways underneath him as he ducks and weaves), or doing the motorbike thing in a barrel race. :)

Um, I wasn't going to mention the wording ... but a big thing at the moment is marketing horses as a "performance prospect" or "ideal sporthorse". Basically, these two terms indicate that the horse is suited to a number of disciplines, rather than just racing, or just dressage, or just western. So instead of listing the type of breeds the stallion might suit, you might want to say something like, "Performance Stallion suited to western, dressage & pleasure".

Breed snobbery is alive and well, and sometimes you're just better to list the disciplines rather than breeds.

I think that all three examples you've given are very appropriate to the stud's homepage (they do catch the eye, and they do make me think - I'd like to know more about this horse) but they do need a little more tweaking before putting them into a magazine.

Hope this helps. :)